During
my freshman year, I joined an RSO, NBMBAA (NATIONAL BLACK MBA ASSOCIATION. The
organization was established to help minority student who are interested in
getting an MBA one day with anything they will need before they even graduate.
The members of the organization also get to participate in the nation wide
annual NBMBAA conference. The sole purpose of these conference to help students
network and get to know minorities from all walks of life who want to purse the
same thing. The organization here at this university has a graduate and an
undergraduate chapter, usually these 2 chapters work separately and do no
interact what so ever unless we have joined event. This is because, the
undergrad chapter has a different curriculum/pace it follows however due to the
decline in membership in the undergrad chapter.
This
changed was in discussion before I because an Illini, the beginning of my
sophomore year is when the organizations actually merged in hopes of saving the
NBMBAA chapter here and still be able to receive sponsorship and financial
support. The association provides the chapter here funds to be able to get food
for every general assembly meeting and also funds for these specific
conferences. The merging of the two organization was a turning point in the history
of the chapter on the u of I campus. The graduate chapter helped better prepare
the students.
The
organization merging caused most undergrad student to be more serious, because
they are not being lead by a mate but rather an older person who has being
through what the students are aspiring to do one day. The structure of the
chapters changed completely because now both chapters have to ensure that the
undergrad students are gaining every knowledge and skill needed and also the
grad students are not being bored with things they have seen or dealt with for
some time. The graduate students embraced
the undergraduate students; some graduate students took some mentees from the
undergrad chapter. The change in the dynamics of the organization helped the
organization for the better because the meeting were more organized, students
get to network with people they would have been gotten the chance to meet,
students are also gaining various career opportunities with the grad chapter
members.
For
as long as the 2 chapters merged, the Illinois chapter of NBMBAA has improved
tremendously, students have expressed their satisfaction with the way the new
chapter is operating. Former member who left the group because they seem to not
be gaining anything from the org have heard about the new improvements and
changed made and have rejoined. The idea of merging the organizations before
seemed like it would cause problems and a lot of inconveniences for both the
grad and undergrad students. This turned out to be the best decision and should
have been done years ago.
On the substance of what you wrote, you spent most of the time talking about the separate organizations and then the merged one, but you didn't talk about your own experiences much at all. What does getting prepared to become an MBA mean? If you took that as an organizing question, you could then answer it general and for you specifically. Where were you well prepared already? What deficiencies did you have that you had to alleviate? And now, somewhat later and having gone through the experience, do you still want to become an MBA? The answers to those questions would make this a more interesting essay on the substance.
ReplyDeleteAnother matter you might have elaborate on is the funding. I gathered from what you said that the national organization has revenues that it then distributes to local chapters. If that is correct, it would be good to explain the source of those revenues. You didn't have to pay dues to join, or did you? I hope that's not the source of the revenues as it would seem to be self-defeating.
I said in class that I would criticize grammar and the like, but I encourage you in future posts to proofread what you've written and get rid of the small errors that detract from the writing. As just one example, right after you first write NBMBAA there is a left parenthesis, but there is no associated right parenthesis thereafter. Distractors of that sort can make the reader less disposed to your ideas, so you'd like to eliminate them if you can. Proofreading is not fun, but it is necessary.